Saturday, March 1, 2014

March 1, 2014 The Sunday Whirl/ The Last Thing/Poets United Poetry Pantry #191

Prompt: cage, fuel, assault, six, where, type
trigger, double, mercy, guess, easy, list


The Last Thing
Put six easy
Things on the list
Typed it neatly
Put fuel in the car
Double bubble
Toil and trouble
Mercy me
Oh my

The last thing
I did was to
Say goodbye
Farewell
Pulled the trigger
Left the cage
The door stands
Open now
The list undone
My guess is
It’s all...
    just as well
Mercy me
Oh my




18 comments:

Brian Miller said...

whew...what a story...last thing i did was pull the trigger...
all it takes is 6 things on a list...

Jae Rose said...

I love the sense of making a plan..i guess the wonder is we do not know what is done..

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

There's certainly an air of finality about this poem. What a startling and unnerving conclusion, which, of course, is what you were aiming for.

Pilgrimage

keiths ramblings said...

Ooo-errr! You made me jump when the trigger got pulled! What an interesting and different take on the words.

kaykuala said...

There's so much to live for and the chores seem just ordinary ones. Shouldn't be too trigger happy though! Nicely annell!

Hank

first-day-of-the-month-10110 said...

I see (or read) the pulling of the trigger, not as a gun going off, but the sudden clear decision to leave after months, even years of contemplation. What need to do the things on the list, it's all over as one walks out the door for that final time. That final exclamation as one realizes one is actually doing it.

Elizabeth

Belva Rae Staples said...

The trigger was waiting to be pulled. You left and the cage is empty. No more lists to finish. This is a starkly good write.

humbird said...

The last thing often becomes the first thing to start with on new adventure! Good luck!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

This is a rather astounding write, my friend, from peaceful you! I echo Belva, a starkly good write.

flaubert said...

Annell, the final stanza is pewerful. All things completed on the list. Nice use of metaphor with the trigger, which I didn't read as using a gun.

Pamela ox

flaubert said...

*powerful*

Björn said...

Ouch .. that last stanza... blew me away.

Kim Nelson said...

Whoa! You make that final act seem so simply done.

http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2014/02/27/prompts-and-promises/

WabiSabi said...

Freedom (from lists and who knows what all else! !!! Mercy me, oh, my!! You go girl!

Sumana Roy said...

trigger was pulled..that set everything rolling ... wow...a powerful write up..

Robyn Greenhouse said...

Better to leave those lists undone if they leave you feeling trapped in a cage!

M.Z said...

Left the door open....amazing!

Brian Miller said...

thanks annell....smiles.
he is home and resting
and that allows me to rest a bit more.
smiles.