tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post6118715600060189248..comments2024-03-04T15:47:04.422-07:00Comments on Somethings I Think About-Annell: August 14, 2014 dVerse/ An Emptiness Withinannell4http://www.blogger.com/profile/07629830133868270690noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-64876947709482314552014-08-15T03:29:41.352-06:002014-08-15T03:29:41.352-06:00Achingly sad poem, but the rhythm works beautifull...Achingly sad poem, but the rhythm works beautifully.vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-63434941847973280942014-08-15T03:08:01.734-06:002014-08-15T03:08:01.734-06:00the words rose from sorrow's flame..the only h...the words rose from sorrow's flame..the only happiness lies in the god-gifted fond memories of which even many are deprived...it's so hard...Sumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-33933690984547037812014-08-14T18:31:37.020-06:002014-08-14T18:31:37.020-06:00Nice. This is a quiet poem--I hear it with a gentl...Nice. This is a quiet poem--I hear it with a gentle rhythm. Even at the end when love's energy is on fire, it smolders with a hidden heat. Jeffhttps://mytinythroes.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-86779671200958285742014-08-14T16:26:24.206-06:002014-08-14T16:26:24.206-06:00A beautiful elegy - repetitions make up a lot of t...A beautiful elegy - repetitions make up a lot of the rhythms here - with anapests playing a large part but you accent hard syllables in a row a few times for effect..and it's a dramatic effect along with assonance and assimilation. The rhythms here are very American, not quite the drum beats that the southwest would impose, more the visual rhythms the Aspen trees unique from their root system above ground would suggest in that your rhythms are intrinsically tied to the subject. Very moving and beautiful poem! Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-56062879449942665122014-08-14T15:28:44.805-06:002014-08-14T15:28:44.805-06:00Excellent haunting romantic poetics, much enjoyed;...Excellent haunting romantic poetics, much enjoyed; the rhythms are extant, these beats are self-evident; but the MTB called for diagramming--& I, too, resisted. Some of us are just bad, mischievous only, no reflection on our poetics. Glenn Buttkushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10680725814199700692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-23761645431716151832014-08-14T15:28:30.664-06:002014-08-14T15:28:30.664-06:00This is sad. Amazing how a broken heart lingers. ...This is sad. Amazing how a broken heart lingers. I like the imagery in this.Myrna R.https://www.blogger.com/profile/15088915165678737118noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-70976053805049786292014-08-14T14:15:20.982-06:002014-08-14T14:15:20.982-06:00In my opinion the hardest obstacles of my life hav...In my opinion the hardest obstacles of my life have been the emptiness that comes in different colored ways..of lost of human and animal true friend too...but then the loss of even my soul..a laugh ..or even the memory of what a smile feels like true..but what i know..IS..wherever there is WiLL and a never give up on what now will bring now again..now when things change true..is..<br /><br />there is always the now of now.. for tomorrow..<br /><br />where something greater than ever...never experienced before..<br /><br />can fill AND feel the darkest<br />coldest<br />spaces<br />of<br />existence<br />human<br />toiled<br />and<br />true!<br />empty<br />come<br />overflowing<br />FULL!..:)Katie Mia Frederickhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01336627766755378406noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-61359161663859988162014-08-14T14:09:04.607-06:002014-08-14T14:09:04.607-06:00In this poem you say very little with very many wo...In this poem you say very little with very many words.Vacciniushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03631121664181976045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-44773209709512553212014-08-14T14:08:14.437-06:002014-08-14T14:08:14.437-06:00beautiful, passionate, sad!! i loved reading this....beautiful, passionate, sad!! i loved reading this... there was a rhythm, a gentle music to this ...Arushi Ahujahttp://thetaleofaglobetrotter.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-63789758847786771232014-08-14T14:02:27.086-06:002014-08-14T14:02:27.086-06:00the allusions to the miner trapped under the earth...the allusions to the miner trapped under the earth took me right back to the rescue of those guys a few years ago...and it is effective in conveying the feeling early on....i can def feel the rhythm as i read this...i wonder too if it would be the same stresses and pauses that you would think as well...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-66627093648640519292014-08-14T13:49:23.090-06:002014-08-14T13:49:23.090-06:00like roots beneath the soil... and we can see what...like roots beneath the soil... and we can see what grows of it....love the peter pan image.... a felt piece annell<br />p.s. was wondering if you want to highlight the stresses as gay suggests?Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-9057172956502874716.post-59749859781345175032014-08-14T13:48:51.405-06:002014-08-14T13:48:51.405-06:00the gentleness of the rhythm here works so well .....the gentleness of the rhythm here works so well .. and I love the metaphor of the Aspen tree and the miner below.. wonderfully sad.brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.com