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The
Last Thing
Put
six easy
Things
on the list
Typed
it neatly
Put
fuel in the car
Double
bubble
Toil
and trouble
Mercy
me
Oh my
The
last thing
I did
was to
Say
goodbye
Farewell
Pulled
the trigger
Left
the cage
The
door stands
Open
now
The list
undone
My
guess is
It’s
all...
just as well
Mercy
me
Oh my
18 comments:
whew...what a story...last thing i did was pull the trigger...
all it takes is 6 things on a list...
I love the sense of making a plan..i guess the wonder is we do not know what is done..
There's certainly an air of finality about this poem. What a startling and unnerving conclusion, which, of course, is what you were aiming for.
Pilgrimage
Ooo-errr! You made me jump when the trigger got pulled! What an interesting and different take on the words.
There's so much to live for and the chores seem just ordinary ones. Shouldn't be too trigger happy though! Nicely annell!
Hank
I see (or read) the pulling of the trigger, not as a gun going off, but the sudden clear decision to leave after months, even years of contemplation. What need to do the things on the list, it's all over as one walks out the door for that final time. That final exclamation as one realizes one is actually doing it.
Elizabeth
The trigger was waiting to be pulled. You left and the cage is empty. No more lists to finish. This is a starkly good write.
The last thing often becomes the first thing to start with on new adventure! Good luck!
This is a rather astounding write, my friend, from peaceful you! I echo Belva, a starkly good write.
Annell, the final stanza is pewerful. All things completed on the list. Nice use of metaphor with the trigger, which I didn't read as using a gun.
Pamela ox
*powerful*
Ouch .. that last stanza... blew me away.
Whoa! You make that final act seem so simply done.
http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2014/02/27/prompts-and-promises/
Freedom (from lists and who knows what all else! !!! Mercy me, oh, my!! You go girl!
trigger was pulled..that set everything rolling ... wow...a powerful write up..
Better to leave those lists undone if they leave you feeling trapped in a cage!
Left the door open....amazing!
thanks annell....smiles.
he is home and resting
and that allows me to rest a bit more.
smiles.
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