Gravity
you say gravity i
think of the east river stylish cement shoes
or times square the
13th of september words spoken
someone tipped
over bonds severed darkness fell
shortly after
lunch food remained on the table angry words
uttered spoken shouted
shock stumbled
into the street how could it happen
so
suddenly unexpected out of the blue
like a sink
hole happening underground for years
out of sight now
silence the echo gravity the memory
October 22,
2015
8 comments:
Wow! You hit an emotional level here which gripped my heart. I don't know what the 13th of September was, but I don't need to know. You take me with you all the way: sink hole, underground, echo, "gravity the memory." Wow!
Agreed with Susan.. this seems to be something grave and serious. The emotional impact in this poem comes off strong and unwavering.
I can feel the shock, the disbelief....."like a sinkhole", the solid ground under one's feet suddenly collapsing. Well written, my friend. I can feel the emotions.
The brevity and impact of each line sends an emotional ripple effect...closing in this strong scene...powerful writing, annell.
Very strong poem. The heaviness of every line is there.
So many layers to this, I read and re-read, and keep finding new implications.
I really like the way these sets of words connect and yet pull in contrast. Very effective for this prompt.
What a strong story, Annell. I think there is much more to this story than we see on the surface!
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