
One Shot Poetry -- Wednesday's Poem
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Lovely maiden,
Her tongue is long
And slides from her open mouth.
She seldom speaks,
But stands at attention,
The sentinel of the portal.
She is one who is always there,
But...for the first time,
She reveals her long kept secret.
She reaches out with a very long thin arm,
Then tightly clinched fists, as tight as little clams,
In the morning, a show of lacy sparklers.
14 comments:
I so like "In the morning, a show of lacy sparklers." Beautiful image!
ha. love how you brought this together...at first i was wondering where you were going...an excellent unveiling there at the end...happy one shot!
Sublime imagery in this piece, thanks for sharing
Lovely and taut, Annell. I too liked the unexpected ending. Brilliantly written. Thank you. Gay
Very interesting, and a great closing line.
Very pretty
Flower inspired art. I love it. Trees inspired me this week. I love nature.
Enjoyed reading your poem, and think the last two lines: "Then tightly clinched fists, as tight as little clams, / In the morning, a show of lacy sparklers." Beautiful images. Happy One Shot!
Annell I love this! I have Sanseverias (aka Snake plant and mother-in-laws tongue) and I love it when they bloom, they smell so good... I absolutely love the imagery...
I like the flow, the spare language, the vivid finish.
As Dianne pointed out, I've always called those Mother In Law's Tongues.
I enjoyed this, Annell. :-)
Oh a lovely poem for a plant that I always thought had a terrible name - mother-in-law's tongue. I have never seen this plant flower, it makes it so beautiful and you words do it justice.
Lovely piece - I have never seen this plant either...I learned something new in the beautiful poem today...thank you...bkm
Enchanting. I love the last line, which just shimmers.
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