Missed Opportunity
standing
alone snow still on the ground the sun shining
shadows from bare
trees sliding down adobe walls bleeding onto the sidewalk
the polish and
shine promise... something you were there
your hand grasped
mine hard but hollow on the wall
hollow too you
speak of parties that is all
you show no
interest in me or mine
it all feels
hollow after my effort i lay before you
something
precious true my best
you disappear i
feel hollow your retreating footsteps
echo
echo
the sound of the
shining sun the pointless afternoon that is all there is
no meeting of
minds why should i be surprised always hoping for more
more than meets the
eye that you will be more another missed opportunity
January 17,
2015
11 comments:
life is full of missed opportunities...and people that will disappoint us...as we disappoint them...i think it is all too human to believe in others so fast...only to be burned...
Yes, it does all feel hollow...
There is always sadness in looking back at those missed opportunities, but one can always hope that fate will change. But meanwhile, I do understand the hollow feeling, Annell.
Life is full of missed opportunities but also with opportunists we never should have taken,
Oh this is so sad and beautiful, Annell. As humans are so - human - disappointment is inevitably part of the picture, sadly. I hope for better days ahead.
I do like your style.
ZQ
Who missed the opportunity? If only the speaker could get angry and stop writing the romance stories. Perhaps an opportunity is missed to commune with the trees.
At first I found the form confusing, but when I relaxed and just let the words read, I adored this piece. So much shared in this telling of relationship.
very interesting style
I think empty meetings with people can be worse than isolation..they make us feel more lonely perhaps...besides it was their loss ;)
So sad for a meeting to be hollow like that, when more could have been. Great poem it really calls up emotions.
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