Coming Back
i do not mean to be
unkind      but the very idea                  of coming back 
goes against the grain              if that is what you think       so be it
you can't go home
again      no experience                           can be repeated exactly            
even deja vu            is said to be a
trick of the brain            in trying to remember              
(put back together)              we are tricked  into
thinking     it has happened before               
still it is always with us     crawling beneath the
surface     burning the skin
mongrel dog                              what we think                     we cannot stand
sure
enough                               happens                               when least expected
the pain of it
all                          an explosion                       dropped without a care
lost                                             we stand
witness                and then it is over
the little
grasshopper in the chest       stops                  when all along it never took a rest
not a day off                              it
did its' work                   strong without complaint
there will be no return               when it is over                  it is over
no one is
expected       there is no knock at the door             silence persists
this very day will
not come again         nor this season                            nor will i
February 2, 2016
 
 
12 comments:
Oh I very much share your view... there is no reverse, not way to return.. and if there where I would not really like it I think
Oh, I really like this poem, Annell. In fact, it was YOUR poem that inspired the poem I just wrote for this prompt. (Hope you will take a look.) I tend to agree with you that there is no return. Once the day, the season, life passes, it will not return again. Well penned!!
I most like that little grasshopper in the chest, doing its endless work.........."it never took a rest....strong without complaint...." Very cool, Annell.
Beautifully written :)
Nicely done, and your format caused me to find this tiny poem, which I love:
what we think
happens
an explosion
we stand witness
I accept the finality of life & death ~ Lovely thoughts and thanks for sharing ~
These are my favorite sections:
"still it is always with us crawling beneath the surface burning the skin
mongrel dog"
"the little grasshopper in the chest stops"
Nice! Your format leads to variations in the read, re-read... ironically, it comes back differently every time. Well done.
I enjoyed reading your take on the prompt and loved your closing line, very definite.
you can't go home again no experience can be repeated exactly
even deja vu is said to be a trick of the brain in trying to remember
I absolutely love this. Thank you for joining my prompt.
You and I feel similarly about this. Well written!
GreaTest risk of hoping
to live again.. is the
reality of never living
now.. so much to do
so much to see..
yet so
much to forget
that now even exists..:)
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