Monday, July 31, 2017

FEAR/ dVerse

FEAR

i looked into your glittering eyes           saw the darkness                      from which you came

quietly                                      i whispered your name             you did not answer      

i shuddered                              put my hand to my throat                     covered my mouth

drew a breath              then exhaled and slowly whispered the words           …happy birthday!                               


            

15 comments:

lillianthehomepoet.wordpress.com said...

Surprise ending has me smiling :)

Frank Hubeny said...

That was a surprise ending although I don't know what I would have expected the ending to be now that I've heard that one.

Mark Walters said...

We will fear no birthdays! Just may not remember the right year😥

Linda Kruschke said...

Hopefully the older we get the less we fear.

Sascha Darlington said...

Love the ending! :)

De said...

Love the surprise in the ending! :)

Toni Spencer said...

Nice poem but I do not see the word "fear" in it.

Victoria said...

Just to clarify, Annell, the word in the title doesn't count and I will know to add that next time I host. However, your poem does conjure up a very fear-filled atmosphere, and then the climatic ending works so well.

Nosaint said...

Great ending! Nicely done.

Sherry Marr said...

This poem is intense. I can see the scene clearly. The glittering eyes, the "darkness from which you came."

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Paul John Dear said...

Disturbing and yet comforting.Fascinating piece.

odaciuk said...

It felt like the scene you painted was at someone's death bed and last birthday. Powerful piece!

jp said...

Wonderful. Indeed makes me smile in a simple happiness. Delightful!

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