Monday, July 31, 2017

FEAR/ dVerse

FEAR

i looked into your glittering eyes           saw the darkness                      from which you came

quietly                                      i whispered your name             you did not answer      

i shuddered                              put my hand to my throat                     covered my mouth

drew a breath              then exhaled and slowly whispered the words           …happy birthday!                               


            

15 comments:

  1. That was a surprise ending although I don't know what I would have expected the ending to be now that I've heard that one.

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  2. We will fear no birthdays! Just may not remember the right year😥

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  3. Hopefully the older we get the less we fear.

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  4. Love the surprise in the ending! :)

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  5. Nice poem but I do not see the word "fear" in it.

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  6. Just to clarify, Annell, the word in the title doesn't count and I will know to add that next time I host. However, your poem does conjure up a very fear-filled atmosphere, and then the climatic ending works so well.

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  7. This poem is intense. I can see the scene clearly. The glittering eyes, the "darkness from which you came."

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  9. Disturbing and yet comforting.Fascinating piece.

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  10. It felt like the scene you painted was at someone's death bed and last birthday. Powerful piece!

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  11. Wonderful. Indeed makes me smile in a simple happiness. Delightful!

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