FEAR
i looked into your glittering eyes saw the darkness from which you came
quietly i whispered your name you did not answer
i shuddered put my hand to my throat covered my mouth
drew a breath then exhaled and slowly whispered the words …happy birthday!
13 comments:
Surprise ending has me smiling :)
That was a surprise ending although I don't know what I would have expected the ending to be now that I've heard that one.
We will fear no birthdays! Just may not remember the right year😥
Hopefully the older we get the less we fear.
Love the ending! :)
Love the surprise in the ending! :)
Nice poem but I do not see the word "fear" in it.
Just to clarify, Annell, the word in the title doesn't count and I will know to add that next time I host. However, your poem does conjure up a very fear-filled atmosphere, and then the climatic ending works so well.
Great ending! Nicely done.
This poem is intense. I can see the scene clearly. The glittering eyes, the "darkness from which you came."
Disturbing and yet comforting.Fascinating piece.
It felt like the scene you painted was at someone's death bed and last birthday. Powerful piece!
Wonderful. Indeed makes me smile in a simple happiness. Delightful!
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