Predictions
Predictions are not my game
Except in the winter
Every day I predict snow
Sometimes I am right
At the beginning of the year
The numbers 2458 appeared
The “winds” had changed direction
What did the numbers mean?
I asked for your help
You responded with many options
But said, “In late February or early March
Something will fall into place, you will know”
Hindsight is clear
Number “2” has to do with” soul mission and life purpose”
Number “4” has to do with” application, and hard work”
Number “5” has to do with” important changes”
Number “8” has to do with” giving and receiving, inner-wisdom and intelligence”
Late February or early March
Came and went
I still wasn’t sure…
Sometime later, I knew
Though I was not sure
I had the right words
I was very sure
About the direction of the “wind”
April 15, 2019
https://www.writersdigest.com/editor-blogs/poetic-asides/2019-april-pad-challenge-day-15
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Closing the book on the last chapter. What can you say about the life of a sober man, of character, kind and gentle. Twenty years later, the end of the story for a boy grown to his full height, reflecting the light. Endings are often sad. What do you do when you want to run and yet your legs remain motionless, feet stuck to the ground?
The story ends in summer
You want to run
But stand motionless.
http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2019/04/the-touch-of-snow.htmlToni wants us to write a haibun of 44 - to 150 words of some event in your life, haibuns must be true, not flash fiction.
Write a haibun of 44 - to 150 words of some event in your life - a love gone wrong, birth of a child, a daily walk, a day out of a vacation...anything will work! Remember: haibun are based on a true experience in your life; it is NOT flash fiction.
13 comments:
I think this form really suits your style of writing - the description is spare but full of poetic language. I enjoyed this portrait.
I know how it feels to be stuck by emotions. Well done, I enjoyed your haibun very much :-)
This is lovely and poignant in its glimpse of the poet and portrayal of emotions!
In the first poem, I am impressed by those numbers and their meaning.......in the second, I know there is a story there............so well written.
A vivid puzzle of pieces that evoke an emotional response that runs deep and triggers memories. That's what it did for me and that's why I really like it, Annell
Elizabeth
https://soulsmusic.wordpress.com/2019/04/15/half-way/
I do believe there is a truth in divination. Unfortunately, I can't divine very divinely for myself.
I am not going to comment on the first poem as it does not meet my prompt. However, the haibun is wonderful. You wrote in a few spare words the elegant story of a boy grown to manhood and the grief of his "closing the book". this spare style of haibun really suits you well Annell.
The wanting to run rings true. So very sad. thank you for writing to my prompt.
The prose is most excellent... a very sad way story, yet it lingers with sweet nostalgia.
Thank you for your kind comment, Bjorn.
I really love the first poem, the first stanza made me laugh (I've so been there). And I feel pretty much the same about the rest, predictions are always right and clear... after they happen.
The senryu part of the haibun is so true (and one of the only things that scares me). Not being able to move, especially within my own mind, makes me shake in my boots.
Yes, the form suits you so well. Oh loss makes you immobile. It's...how do I walk, where do I go?
Both these are exquisite pieces of writing! And the haibun particularly moving.
I really enjoyed your haibun. It was touching and beautifully written.
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